ext_7611 ([identity profile] painless-j.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] blamebrampton 2007-10-13 06:46 pm (UTC)

Totally charming and wonderful! Thank you very much, for two chapters instead of one too :)

Oonagh Quigley is my new favourite OC :)

Errors caught:

4a

He return's Ryan's computer -- returns

that he is seeing the only man Harry Potter has ever caused to die -- what about Quirrel?

4b

Honestly, James, if Rose didn't have the biggest smile I've ever seen on her face, I'd tell her what a bad person you are[.]" -- period

"She thinks its wonderful." -- it's

Soon they are at the Potters -- Potters'

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